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ok, a little short i pumped out for the :iconwriters-workshop: 'Unreliable Narrator' workshop. I think I was supposed to do a character sketch, but oops, all this spilled out. Pretty much came from listening to Emmy Lou Harris. If you haven't heard '1917', it is worth youtubing.

I have a very clear idea of Emilie and what's happening with her, but I'm interested to see what you think is happening with her.

Crit for tWR: fav.me/d577vic

So, Crit Questions:
:bulletpink: What do you think is the deal with Emilie?
:bulletpink: What did you feel happened at the end there?
:bulletpink: does this fit your description of an unreliable narrator, why or why not?
:bulletpink: grammar shiz: Anything off, clunky, or grammatically incorrect?

Big ups to :iconoboe-wan: for helping me slug through this one.

EDIT: June 2012, made some edits, retooled the beginning, or rather, rearranged things. Hopefully cleaned up the punctuation but I probably need a little more help with that.
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Given 2014-07-28
And Here Is John by doughboycafe is, in the suggester's words, "a useful reminder that wars aren't just all about men and trenches" on the 100th anniversary of the First World War. ( Suggested by VFreie and Featured by neurotype )
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VertFey Featured By Owner 1 day ago
This so deserved a daily deviation Congratulations.
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doughboycafe Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Professional Writer
Thanks :D
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captivityisevil Featured By Owner 1 day ago
love it
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princessanastasia434 Featured By Owner 1 day ago
nice
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SimplySilent Featured By Owner 1 day ago
I rarely read literature on DA, but I'm glad I gave this one a try! Wonderful story that gets right to the feels. 
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doughboycafe Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Professional Writer
Glad you gave this one a try as well!
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Hobbyist Writer
My heart is aching. Thank you so much for this piece. It reminds us that war is not just about guns and deaths and valiance and right versus wrong, it reminds us it is about people.
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doughboycafe Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Professional Writer
Thank you for reading it and for getting it.
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure!
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Hobbyist Writer
:iconcongratsdd1plz::iconcongratsdd2plz::iconcongratsdd3plz:
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